The Troubles of Being a Superhero
You may think being a superhero is exciting, but it can get tiring. You always have to be alert for the terrors of the city. When you're a superhero you never get to say,
"Time to relax!"
Then there's false alarms. You get dressed and fly around, looking for what's causing trouble. Then when you realize it was a false alarm, you get exhausted and annoyed. So if you ever consider being a superhero, ask yourself,
" Do I really want to wake up in the middle of the night, get dressed, save lives, then repeat that every day or night?"
I really like your story and the descriptive language. I think that you should read it out loud to someone because there is a few grammar mistakes, like the ending line you misspelled repeat. Great story though.
ReplyDeleteYour story is very creative stitch! But I do think you should go over and undo the edit where you put it in the middle. The end of your story made me laugh. I think you did a really good job!
ReplyDeleteYou need a comma after exciting. Try using the feedback given to you to improve your story. Your story is a little repeatitive, try reading it out loud.
ReplyDeleteYou story has a clear matter of fact way describing the troubles of a superhero. You have used some great descriptive words to help get your point across such as alert, exhausted, annoyed, and consider. The only thing to add maybe to the last line were you say "repeat that evey (spelling; every) day" to every day or night.
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